Join for FREE | Take the Tour Lost Password?
[x]

deviantART

 


The moment between a dream and awake
I saw you

With your ever backwards gate
A small smile
Honeynut brown eyes

Walking slowly,
Like a distant forgotten memory

I lay in bed, half awake
Half dreaming

Can I let myself fall deeper into a slumber
So that I may see once again my long lost lover

Or do I push away the memory
As I wake up, and prepare myself

It’s going to be an empty day.
Creative Commons License
Some rights reserved. This work is licensed under a
Creative Commons Attribution-Noncommercial-No Derivative Works 3.0 License.
:icontheleavesofmemory:

Author's Comments

Right after I woke up but before I opened my eyes.. I could see him walking from far away.

I don't know if it was a dream or a memory.

But I don't think I care..... I miss him.

Comments


love 0 0 joy 0 0 wow 0 0 mad 0 0 sad 0 0 fear 0 0 neutral 0 0
:iconartisticallylearning:
very very nice & simple. I love it! :love:

--
"You don't take a photograph, you make it. " --Ansel Adams
My Stock art! ~ALearning-stock
:icontheleavesofmemory:
thankyouuuuu :heart: :heart:

(for the fave as well) :love:

--
JN: ~25.09.89 - 14.01.09~ Forever in my heart

Member of =RawEm0tion ~Acid-Burst-Love-Fed
Avatar by ~marchetooo


:heart: CONTEST FOR A CAUSE! WINNERS [link] :heart:
:iconash4love:
:tighthug:

Only thing..."brown hazelnut" is a bit redundant. I focused on that more than need be because of it.

I know its hard, but it's going to be okay someday.

--
"Our doubts are traitors, and make us lose the good we oft might win, by fearing to attempt" William Shakespeare
:icontheleavesofmemory:
I know it's redudant but its always about the same person :( ... another thought I had for that line was "Honeynut Brown" ...

--
JN: ~25.09.89 - 14.01.09~ Forever in my heart

Member of =RawEm0tion ~Acid-Burst-Love-Fed
Avatar by ~marchetooo


:heart: CONTEST FOR A CAUSE! WINNERS [link] :heart:
:iconsioraine:
It's fine the way it is. :huggle:
Dreams are absolutely needed sometimes. The more you dream, the more you'll remember.
It'll be okay. <3 :hug:


--


Sometimes people run away just to see if anyone cares enough to chase after.
:iconash4love:
Yeah...that does work better when I read it over.

It is perfectly acceptable for your poems to be about the same person. That part doesn't feel redundant to me. Was just those two words :hug:

--
"Our doubts are traitors, and make us lose the good we oft might win, by fearing to attempt" William Shakespeare
:icontheleavesofmemory:
Yeah... I should of went with my gut on that orginally... I changed it to hazelnut when I was writing because I didn't want to betrey the memory... but this reads better.

--
JN: ~25.09.89 - 14.01.09~ Forever in my heart

Member of =RawEm0tion ~Acid-Burst-Love-Fed
Avatar by ~marchetooo


:heart: CONTEST FOR A CAUSE! WINNERS [link] :heart:
:icontheleavesofmemory:
thanks dear :hug:

--
JN: ~25.09.89 - 14.01.09~ Forever in my heart

Member of =RawEm0tion ~Acid-Burst-Love-Fed
Avatar by ~marchetooo


:heart: CONTEST FOR A CAUSE! WINNERS [link] :heart:
:iconash4love:
=) I'm happy to have helped.

--
"Our doubts are traitors, and make us lose the good we oft might win, by fearing to attempt" William Shakespeare

Details

July 11
591 bytes

Statistics

13
9 [who?]
75 (0 today)
2 (0 today)

Site Map