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I tripped over your memory today
It haunts the ground I walk on
I found myself falling into open arms
Remembered your voice as it called my name

I walked into a wall today
Pressed my nose against the glass
I remember revolving doors
And how you stopped one in its tracks

I fell down the stairs today
And nearly twisted my left knee
And I remember how all the times you loved me
You never saw me hurt

I paced around my room today
Remembering our first phone call
My voice still shaking, I couldn’t sleep
Small things like that may never change

I found myself a gift today
Remembering how little you gave me
And how so little meant so much
I slid it on my pinkie, one finger from where it’s meant to be

A memory we’ll never have
A birthstone ring of mine and yours
Little diamonds, little stones
I turn it to the side, read the small engraving

In Loving Memory,
A place you’ll always be.
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I feel like crying, but when I can't cry I write.

It feels sort of distant, still waiting to get the ring.





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4th stanza line 2 should be "our" instead of "out" right?

The message is pretty strong. And I know how you feel with writing being an outlet. When your emotions can't escape through tears--or some other form--writing is always there to help it pour out onto paper.

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"I feel better now I know that I'm different."--Vanilla Sky
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Yes, I fixed that that little typo, thank you for pointing it out :heart:


Writing is the one release I can always count on.. thank you for reading, commenting, and faving.

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JN: ~25.09.89 - 14.01.09~ Forever in my heart

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beautifully executed :D
:icontheleavesofmemory:
thank you :heart:

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You're welcome

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"I feel better now I know that I'm different."--Vanilla Sky
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This is brilliant! I absolutely adore every bit of it. Not much else I can really say ^^;

:hug:

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"Our doubts are traitors, and make us lose the good we oft might win, by fearing to attempt" William Shakespeare
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:hug:

People seem to like it when I make my writing more open so they can imagine it themselves ...

thankyou for faving it :heart:

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JN: ~25.09.89 - 14.01.09~ Forever in my heart

Member of =RawEm0tion ~Acid-Burst-Love-Fed
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Anytime love! :heart:

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"Our doubts are traitors, and make us lose the good we oft might win, by fearing to attempt" William Shakespeare
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...Awesome...
simply awesome, can't say anything else. :):)
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wow, thank you :heart:

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