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I miss the shouting, the crying, the confessions
The noise of your fluttered broken heartbeat
Our shaky exhales at skins' first contact
No more simple sounds of life
I miss hearing about the pain, the joy
Of insignificant things, that come with each new day

I’ve heard it said a thousand times
That peace in the wind is a precious thing
The emptiness that comes in comfort swings
That silence leaves a breath to in/exhale
A moment to ponder and a moment to dream

I’ve heard it said a thousand times
That time will seal our jagged souls
All wounds will be healed and
I will find perfect, true, beautiful
again.

I think you are a liar,
Everyone who has said those things
Silence is an empty thing

And time will never heal what has slowly turned to dust.
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Silence is Golden,
Time heals all wounds







If only such cliches were true </3

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Lovely.

The second line would sound better with "fluttering" instead of "fluttered" and "broken hearts" should be replaced with something else. "Wistful souls" or something of the like?
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I like fluttered best for the first line because it feels more rushed and broken. "fluttering" is too beautiful a word for what I'm reaching for ... but I agree on the broken hearts, it seems redundant because I said "broken heartbeat" earlier ...

Thank you for the critique ... I'll think about that line.

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JN: ~25.09.89 - 14.01.09~ Forever in my heart

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Oh, beautiful! I love your writing!
I figured out what how the emoticon thing works so here is my rating for this. It would be 5 stars but I saw a small problem where I didn't really understand the "I will find perfect, true, beautiful again" part but I should just rate it a 5 star.
:star::star::star::star::star-half:

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It's like their moving!
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hmm.. perhaps I should try to make that more clear,

I was trying to describe love without saying it. The first time I wrote it it was

I will find perfect, true, beautiful love
again.


But it didn't feel right with me, so I dropped the world love and hoped the definition would be implied.

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JN: ~25.09.89 - 14.01.09~ Forever in my heart

Member of =RawEm0tion ~Acid-Burst-Love-Fed
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I want to write a critique but it says I have to subscribe, oh well. It's fine the way you wrote it.

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It's like their moving!
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Yeah ... the critique section is just for subscribers, which sucks ... but comments work as well.

Thank you :aww:

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JN: ~25.09.89 - 14.01.09~ Forever in my heart

Member of =RawEm0tion ~Acid-Burst-Love-Fed
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You can never say thank you and your welcome too much so your welcome!

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It's like their moving!
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ahaha :aww: thank you =p

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JN: ~25.09.89 - 14.01.09~ Forever in my heart

Member of =RawEm0tion ~Acid-Burst-Love-Fed
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Ok, I'm just not gonna sleep tonight. I love Deviant art too much.

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It's like their moving!

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